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帮帮忙,修改一下英语作文. Dear Miss Happy,
I need your help,Could you give me some advice?
The problem is with my schoolwork.I will gratuate from junior high school,so I am very stressed out because my school work is too much for me.And I can't sleep enough in the night,because I usually do my homewrk unil 23:00.As these I always argues with my parents,classmates and my friends.And I even can't remember the knowledge what I have learned in class,and I can't concentrate in class,either.I'm worry about my schoolwork.Could you help me?I hope I could receive your letter with advice as soon as possible.
Yours
Lin Tao
（题目是：面临初中毕业,你（Lin Tao）压力很大,表现为：作业太多,睡眠不足；脾气不好,常和父母,同学发生冲突；记忆力下降,上课不能集中精力.你把以上问题向自己喜欢的英文报社的知心姐姐倾诉,希望得到她的帮助.词数：80左右.）请指出错误的明确位置并说明原因,谢谢. 我是初中生...请勿用生僻单词...谢谢.
I need your help,Could you give me some advice?
The problem is with my schoolwork.I will gratuate from junior high school,so I am very stressed out because my school work is too much for me.And I can't sleep enough in the night,because I usually do my homewrk unil 23:00.As these I always argues with my parents,classmates and my friends.And I even can't remember the knowledge what I have learned in class,and I can't concentrate in class,either.I'm worry about my schoolwork.Could you help me?I hope I could receive your letter with advice as soon as possible.
Yours
Lin Tao
（题目是：面临初中毕业,你（Lin Tao）压力很大,表现为：作业太多,睡眠不足；脾气不好,常和父母,同学发生冲突；记忆力下降,上课不能集中精力.你把以上问题向自己喜欢的英文报社的知心姐姐倾诉,希望得到她的帮助.词数：80左右.）请指出错误的明确位置并说明原因,谢谢. 我是初中生...请勿用生僻单词...谢谢.
Dear Miss Happy,
I need your help. Could you give me some advice?
两句之间是并列句,没有连词时不能用逗号连接.
The problem is (去掉with 或 把with改成about) my schoolwork. I will
可以直接说“问题是...”或“问题是关于...的”.
gratuate from junior high school, so I am very stressed out because my school work is too much (去掉for me). And I can't sleep (well) in
for me多余,前面有my (school work)；enough一般指修饰名词/形容词/副词,很少修饰动词sleep,改成well更好.
the night, because I usually do my homework until 23:00.
(As these改成So) I always (argues改成argue) with my parents,
as表示原因时是连词,不是介词,不如一起改成so“因此”更简单实用.
I为第一人称,不是第三人称单数,所以动词argue不能用三单形式,用原形.
classmates and my friends. And I even can't remember the knowledge (what改成that 或 去掉what） I have learned in class, and I can't
此为定语从句,否则the knowledge和what重复.that代替the knowledge,做learned的宾语,可以省略.另外还可以直接把the knowledge省略,留下what.
concentrate in class, either. I'm (worry改成worried） about my
固定短语：be worried about = worry about,所以也可以把I'm改成I.
schoolwork. Could you help me?
I hope I (could改成can) receive your letter with advice as soon as possible.
hope的从句不能用虚拟语气,直接用一般现在时can receive...即可.
另外根据段落大意,此句最好单独成为一段.
Yours,
Yours后面必须打上逗号,以符合英文书信规范.
Lin Tao 原创回答团（第159号团员）
I need your help. Could you give me some advice?
两句之间是并列句,没有连词时不能用逗号连接.
The problem is (去掉with 或 把with改成about) my schoolwork. I will
可以直接说“问题是...”或“问题是关于...的”.
gratuate from junior high school, so I am very stressed out because my school work is too much (去掉for me). And I can't sleep (well) in
for me多余,前面有my (school work)；enough一般指修饰名词/形容词/副词,很少修饰动词sleep,改成well更好.
the night, because I usually do my homework until 23:00.
(As these改成So) I always (argues改成argue) with my parents,
as表示原因时是连词,不是介词,不如一起改成so“因此”更简单实用.
I为第一人称,不是第三人称单数,所以动词argue不能用三单形式,用原形.
classmates and my friends. And I even can't remember the knowledge (what改成that 或 去掉what） I have learned in class, and I can't
此为定语从句,否则the knowledge和what重复.that代替the knowledge,做learned的宾语,可以省略.另外还可以直接把the knowledge省略,留下what.
concentrate in class, either. I'm (worry改成worried） about my
固定短语：be worried about = worry about,所以也可以把I'm改成I.
schoolwork. Could you help me?
I hope I (could改成can) receive your letter with advice as soon as possible.
hope的从句不能用虚拟语气,直接用一般现在时can receive...即可.
另外根据段落大意,此句最好单独成为一段.
Yours,
Yours后面必须打上逗号,以符合英文书信规范.
Lin Tao 原创回答团（第159号团员）