戴云笔记2-1各位牛人们.上完戴云教主的课快3年了,戴云推荐的2-1框架,现在已经记不太清楚了,笔记上只写着“支持面有点

戴云笔记2-1
各位牛人们.上完戴云教主的课快3年了,戴云推荐的2-1框架,现在已经记不太清楚了,笔记上只写着“支持面有点充分论述+反对面优点一到两点简略论述”但是这样怎么体现出强烈支持支持面呢?是不是还需要做比较?有没有作文范例可以给一下的?

这是戴云教主对一篇2-1的修改,希望对你有帮助
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

审题：
1、观点选择类,同意哪个观点并给出理由和例证.
2、题目特点：含有绝对性的词语never,因此态度是不同意该观点.
3、段落结构：2-1

提纲
1、（很多人认为要集思广益）但本人不同意.
2、主体部分（此部分可以多采取对比论证的方式）
（1）很多时候需要一个人独自做出决定.在情况紧急的时候（比如遇到灾难、突发事故等等,此处当举例以细节说明）；在日常生活中有很多事情根本不需要讨论决定(即便它很重要),个人简单思考之后决定即可,否则会及其没有效率（此处也可以举例说明）.
（2）需要集思广益的原因是个人智力总是有限的.但是即便是一个人独自做出的决定也不一定就是错误的.原因：根据生活中积累的经验可以快速做出决定.有时候本能也是决定的正确依据.
（3）不可否认在很多情况下人们应当在广泛听取意见之后再做决定（可以举国家大事为例）,这样可以让决定更加的理性,这甚至也是现代社会民主制度的要求.（对方观点的合理性）
3、结论：虽然两方各有优势,但是绝不能够说人们在任何情况下都绝对不应该独自做出决定,这种观点太过于绝对,因此我的观点是.

Many people hold the opinion that before one person makes an important decision, he or she should draw on collective wisdom and absorb all useful ideas to make the decision more rational. However, there is the opposite voice saying that people can make one important decision depending on his or her own judgments. From my own perspective, I can hardly give my approval for the former point view. I think that although we need advice and opinions from a mass of persons, it is not to say that it’s impossible for some to make big decisions himself in any case.

The first reason I want to put forward is that, in many occasions it’s indispensable for people to make up their minds without others’ ideas. Life abounds with such examples. One of the best typical instances is that if you suffered from some nature (natural) disasters, or some accidents, you would determine how to get rid of the crisis as quickly as possible even though nobody could give you useful advice at the right moment. For example, just imagine that you ran (这里不需要再用虚拟语气了,你可以直接说 imagine that you run) into one devastating tsunami which would happen once in a century when you were wandering (同理用are wandering) at a coastal beach in a certain seaside city to enjoy the beautiful sunshine, would you take out your mobile phone to ask for advice from your relatives one by one or just run away to the nearest elevation immediately? I think the answer is definitely the latter one. At a critical moment like this, it is out of question that people will have no time to have a discussion to determine which way is the best. Besides the emergencies like (like 是介词,不能后面接从句,应该加上what,变成 like what I talk about above)I talk about above, people will always face some conditions that even the issues are very important and people should be wise enough to determine, (你这儿用逗号,两句话之间明显缺乏连接呀,到底是什么关系呢?语义不明,你这个长句子在逻辑上有很大的问题) there is no need to collect ideas from a group because that will lead to a waste of time and vigor (很少用到waste of vigor吧,我觉得用应该用waste of energy,欢迎与我探讨). Measure the cost of collecting wisdom and think about the efficiency (我觉得这里用祈使句不是很好, 可以换用别的说法,比如说条件状语从句,或者你直接用动名词做状语也可以,主要因为我们的位置是等待老师评判的考生嘛,所以有点读者意识是好的,如果你坚持自己说话的方式我也支持：－)) so it’s obvious that sometimes to make an important decision alone may be a better choice. When you were asking your classmates which dining hall you should go for lunch this afternoon, all the dishes would be sold out so that you would have nothing to eat. (呵呵,你忽然冒出这么一句,真是另我感到错手不及呀,你这一句到底想表达一个什么意思来支持你的论点呢?其实可以展开写一下把你的例子说清楚,或者干脆不要.)

The second reason to prove the necessity of making decisions alone is that, although one person’s ability is limited so people often have to put (their) heads together so as to (你前面已经有了一个so了,这边用 in order to 就显得通顺多了) get better results, it’s uncertain that the determinations made all alone will always (be) wrong. (我 个人认为这个句子的逻辑是有问题的, 我们可以把他翻译成中文来看： 另一个用以证明自己做决定的必要性的原因是：虽然个人力量是有限的,为了得到更好的结果往往需要集思广义,但是自己做的决定也不一定是错的.首先说,你说 的内容可以成为一个原因,但是不能成为证明“必要性”的原因,如果你有问题,我们可以一起探讨) During the life of everybody, all of (the) people can acquire useful knowledge from books and accumulate rich experiences from daily life ,(这里要加逗号断句,标点符号也是长句子的重要逻辑提示)and these （可以用从句which替换） are enough to solve many problems people meet at ordinary times, so why people have to ask for advice from others as soon as they encounter difficulties. (注意,这不是原因状语从句,所以你在做问句的时候一定要注意句子的完整性,注意助动词的提前和最后的句号的问题)I shall choose to take the test of TOEFL in July but not this month without asking my parents because I think this choice is appropriate according to my realistic English level, for no one else could know me better than myself. (可以再改一下：Without asking my parents, I made the decision of taking the test of TOEFL in July but not this month, because I think it’s a reasonable decision according to current English Level. As you know, no one else could know you better than yourself.)

We cannot deny that people must make up (their own) minds after listening to all kinds of opinions of people as many as possible. (改为from as many people as possible) When one government will (你为什么在这里用将来时呢?可以直接用is trying to)make a big decision, it is no doubt (这里不是强调句型,所以应该用there is no doubt that 的固定搭配,这是一个非常常见的错误,请注意!) that the views of the mass population must be heard first, to make sure that the decision will be rational and people’s rights will be well protected (considered). That’s why we say democracy is much better than autocracy. (这句话完全没有必要,而且考虑到场合,你最好不要说)When the leader of one country will (同上,不用将来时) decide something relate to the national economy and livelihood of the masses (public 比 mass 更好,显得褒义), he should never make the important decision alone. What a good sample (sample? 还是example) that what Adolf Hitler and his Nazi Party did during the Second World War. Listening to more opinions beforehand brings many benefits to not only invidious (individuals) but also countries.

In conclusion, I cannot support the idea that a person should never make an important decision alone because this statement is too absolute to convince me. Whether we should make decisions alone or ask for others’ views (opinions) depends on which (what) kind of problems we face to (are facing), so it’s right (it’d better) to choose the appropriate method instead of simply saying that one is better than the other.